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We gave our script to someone else to read, to point out any mistakes we may have missed or any improvements they suggest. From this we produced our second draft.
Script
After we had written our treatment and started to plan the storyboards we wrote the first draft of our script. The script was necessary for our actors to read, learn their lines and decide if they were happy to be a particular character.
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FIRST DRAFT
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SECOND DRAFT
Script Improvements 1005
Script Improvements 2006
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Script Improvements 1005
As the main aspect we needed to improve was the detail when describing the montage part of the film. We planned this whilst thinking about the way it would be edited together as described on the next page.
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